Wayzata, Minnesota

Monday, July 30, 2012

The Mag 128


Zelko Nedic
with dog
and boot.

Kinky Boots

He stood somber
head lowered
a forlorn feeling submerged
just below the surface
anxiously gnawing at his insides.

His old dog waited
as his master
cursed the malady of his soul
with tail undecided
lost behind this primeval instinct
which erected a fence of indecision
for both.

He chasing curiosities
his dog faithfully watches
his master
with a reputation
of a chambermaid.

His quick-breathing eagerness
tormenting him from the other side
a frenzy of passions
man against beast
his true self exposed

and yet
all the while knowing -
My friend waits for me.

I like to write my poem for magpie's picture prompt after first sight of it
and then by studying the artist.

Today's Magpie Tales has this man, Zelco Nedic- to thank
(besides Tess Kincaid)

one more behind the scenes with Zelco Nedic

If you want to see more Magpie Tales posts
go here


Jenny Woolf said...

This is good, I like how you bring out in the poem the contrast between the tormented human and the faithful simple dog

Little Nell said...

I agree with Jenny, and some of the phrases you have used, like quick-breathing eagerness draw the picture perfectly. The undecided tail speaks volumes too. I couldn't get going again this week - perhaps I'll be back next week.

Raven said...

I liked your take! I also enjoyed hearing about your approach to writing for her prompts.

Brian Miller said...

of a chambermaid..oh my...nice description....and the tension is thick in this one...unveiling our true selves..

JANU said...


Filip and Kristel said...

What a special picture.


laura.forestdreams:) said...

i really like the picture for this prompt...and your poem...makes it even better!! very nice!!

Anonymous said...

Yes, this has a lot of tension and intrigue and surprise - the Chambermaid soul! K.

sage said...

Nice, the picture does leave a lot for the imagination.

Laurie Kolp said...

This is beautiful. I especially like:

He chasing curiosities
his dog faithfully watches
his master
with a reputation
of a chambermaid

Grace said...

I like your approach to the prompt ~

Laurie quoted the stanza I like too ~

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done...thanks for sharing

cloudia charters said...

your final line
could redeem
the phone book!

Aloha from Waikiki
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cloudia charters said...


Not to denigrate your involving poetry!

JJ said...

Karen, this is wonderful. Thank you.

moondustwriter said...

you caught the conflict well I believe
The artist poignantly gives us just a glimpse / the writer draws the character out

Nice to meet you

Sreeja said...

The second last stanza is so good...your poem speaks for the pic in depth....

darlin said...

Kind of makes me want to be a dog in my next life... if I have a say in the matter that is. ;-)

Fantastic writing Karen!

Lyn said...

"Malady of his soul"/"reputation of a chambermaid"..Images galore! I like your plan for writing the prompt!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Lovely images here - love it!

Anna :o]

Jerry E Beuterbaugh said...

Most excellent!

Helen said...

Love the title of your poem ... just got better and better!