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Saturday, March 5, 2011

Saturday Centus - Everything depended

Jenny Matlock


Hello again Saturday Centus bloggers....and other bloggers...are you craving to run wild in 100 words or less with the prompt of this week?  Then please hurry over here
http://jennymatlock.blogspot.com/2011/03/saturday-centus-everything-depended.html

Since I feel for Jenny and her horrible jaw pain...truly I do.....I won't make this too scary or horrible by any means......I sure hope Jenny gets better quickly....

               Was Holly locked in a sweet illusion of love?  They had shared whispered pledges of love to each another.  If Charlie asked, she’d follow him wherever his magic would take them.  Twice he left delicate flowers on the dashboard of her Volvo.  Their first kiss was awkward but those after were filled with love.  He was the answer to all her dreams.  Until yesterday, when a stranger interrupted their dinner date by placing a red envelope beside him and fled.  Was his past catching up?  Slowly he opened it.  Could it be that everything depended upon this single card?

21 comments:

Bookie said...

Oh, such intrigue here! Nice set up making reader want the rest of the story.

darlin said...

I also want to know what was in the red envelope! Awesome writing, keep me hanging for more!

Enjoy this wonderful Saturday we are all blessed with!

Nonna Beach said...

Suspense & a mystery...I love it...excellent job !

Judie said...

Karen, we thought somewhat alike on this one, only yours is much better!!!

Sue said...

Very mysterious. You've definitely piqued my interest!

=)

Poetic Justice said...

Nice set up, definitely want more of this!

jabblog said...

Oh dear! Not ac/dc surely? No, he's been philandering . . .

Jo said...

a red envelope .... oh ... you have left me wanting much much more ...

sage said...

The past... sooner or late it catches up! Now, where is this story going?

bruce said...

excellent post!

GOOD JOB! leaves plenty of room for a sequel!

~Lissa said...

Ooh really mysterious! Sounds like a great start to a bigger story. Great centus!

jfb57 said...

Oooo! Need to know more!

Kat said...

This is excellent! Definitely paves the way for a larger story, I hope you can continue this. I MUST know what was on that card! Kat

5thsister said...

I agree...calls for a part 2!

Ames said...

Well gosh...you left me hanging right in the middle of a love serenade. What's in that card???~Ames

Jaquandor said...

I wonder if Jenny shouldn't do a prompt where the challenge isn't just to use a prompt, but to require the story to continue the previous week's story!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Great build-up. Encore! (I agree with everyone. You need to continue this.)
xoRobyn

jeff campbell said...

Very nicely written and so mysterious...Peace and blessings

cj Schlottman said...

Great Centus! I love the way you set us up for the mysterious ending - also your description of the first kiss.

Namaste..........cj

Tgoette said...

LOL! Inquiring minds want to know! Love the suspense and intrigue here. A really wonderful take on the prompt and so cleverly done too! Great job!

Jenny said...

Oh you sweet girl. Thanks for the healing sentiments. I'm seeing an oral specialist (hmmm...) on Tuesday to see if some of the other teeth are breaking. I swear, I have to quit eating macaroni and gravel so often.

Thanks for not scaring me!

Not so many thanks for leaving me hanging, though. ha!

This was great suspenseful writing...You know I'm a fan, right?

Your word crafting is sublime.