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Image by Tess Kincaid
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Ebbing Away
The woeful song of her spirit
weighed heavy in her broken heart.
A fierce, fiery emotion
was erupting within her.
Foreseeing his arrival,
ignites a kind of ecstasy.
A Sijo poem
My first attempt.
I've been reading Sijo (poems) lately. They are a poem that originated in Korea. A sijo has a fixed number of stressed syllables, usually divided into three or six lines. But the interesting thing about sijo poems, is that they always have a surprise, or unexpected twist or joke, at the end of the poem.
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24 comments:
Lovely... I especially like the first two lines.
Nice, I like poems with a twist!
Good combination of the picture with the emotions.
Greetings,
Filip
lovely poem and lovely painting too. Love that style. Very interesting read about this type of poetry. never heard of it before. Great job.
smiles...i like the excitement that builds with his impending arrival...i like the dance in your words...
Very interesting poetic form; I learned something...
I learned something too. I haven’t got over the vilanelle yet and now I’ve got another form to add! It’s a lovely poem and the fire references (fierce, fiery, eruptions and ignite) makes me think this is a ‘volcanic' relationship
spiritual.
Interesting dichotomy here...
Tess, thanks :)
Brian- thanks, they say the sijo poems were made for singing! So that works for me!
Little Nell you are so spot on! I also had to share on my Facebook that lovely British rock band...I had their music playing in the back ground as long as I could!
Dear Karen: "Edding Away" has an exciting twist at the end like a good Sijo. The "Ebbing Away" is very creative form of poetry. Thank-you~!
Chiccoreal- Thanks so much! This was my first attempt at writing a Sijo. I really enjoy reading them!
And so I learned a new thing today: sijo. The last two lines really seal it!
Thanks to your post, Karen, I came to know something new today. Sijo poems sound interesting. I would want to try the new form, too.
Nice write! :)
Will there be more to that poem? It is truly great as is, but it begs for more.
pretty cool. i liked the poem on its own merit. then read about sijo. very interested and if my head ache goes away and somehow my memory of having a notion to want to learn the rules of writing sijo stays intact, i will give it a whirl.
enjoyed my stroll down from the top and all that orange to find your sijo surprise.
wish i had that glass of orange juice. wouldn't care for it nearly as much were it green
cheers
Although I do not know what a sijo poem is, if this is your first attempt at one I'd dare say it was a success. At least, I enjoyed reading this with a happy ending.
This is a great poem. I like the happy ending.
Sad n a way , this stckholm syndrome where we welcme our oppressor, so many people fighting to defend a system that would see them enslaved , indeed being excited by the prospect !, thanks
Great form....great writing! :-)
i never heard of Sijo.
perfect for you...as much of your writing...stories & poems...have that unexpected twist at the end!!
great poem!!
You're very clever - love the use of words and the Sijo which is new to me.
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